22-6-2020
Skeleton woman retell
One dark stormy day there was a man and his daughter. The man started viciously choking his daughter and pushed her off the edge of the cliff where fish mauled her to death and all that was left was a pile of bones. The fishermen of the nearby town never fished there as it was said to be haunted a few weeks later a new fisherman arrived in the town to catch some fish but no one told him about the haunted spot he got in his boat and sailed out to sea he started to fish in the haunted spot unaware of the consequences that might happen after hours of waiting he finally caught some thing he looked up to find the skeleton woman dancing on the rocks the fisherman screamed turned around his boat and sailed away he turned around to find the skeleton woman following him dancing on the rocks as she slowly follows him he parks up his boat and ran towards his tent he leaped inside and zipped up the door and lit a candle to see if the skeleton woman was close by he peaks outside to find the bones in a pile he quickly arranges the bones completing the skeleton then all of a sudden the skeleton comes back alive then skeleton woman wishes for lips so she can kiss, a stomach to have kids and skin to be human then she turns into a girl then the fisherman shredded a tear then the skeleton woman wipes it from his face and hopes into bed and fall asleep the next day the fisherman took her for his wife
The end
Archie
Wow, Archie. What a story. I thought your beginning was a sad and shocking way to start but I was really pleased that it had a happy ending after all, which I didn't expect. Did you come up with the idea yourself or did something spark the idea for the story?
ReplyDeleteKeep up the great learning and blogging,
:) Sharon - Te Ara Tūhura Education Programme Leader
Hi Archie,
ReplyDeleteYou have retold the story very well and I wonder what the daughter did that was so bad that made her father do what he did. I am pleased that the story did have a happy ending and if there was a part 2 do you think she would make a visit to her father?
Next time can you use some more full stops please.
Keep up your good work and i'm looking forward to some more blogging from you :-)
Cheers,
Leanne