1/5/2020
Piece by piece, the street was disappearing.In the distance a portal shone, sending soft,
golden beams of light out across the evening sky. As the light kissed the clouds they blushed,
becoming pink illuminations that stood and watched the street below like nosey spectators.
I turned around to see the street slowly turning to dust, I ran towards the portal hoping it would
take me somewhere safe. I enter the gold like portal As I come out the other-side The world
starts turning into dust like our town. “Oh no” I screamed. I turn to go back to the portal But this
time the portal starts to dissolve as well, I had nowhere to go then another portal forms a few
miles away. I started to jog towards it. I leaped through it scared where it would take me.
I end on a cloud-land with nothing but a giant throne in the center. Then a giant figure jumps
over me into the throne “Where am I” I asked him, ``Hello, new one welcome to heaven” .
Now what do I do...
golden beams of light out across the evening sky. As the light kissed the clouds they blushed,
becoming pink illuminations that stood and watched the street below like nosey spectators.
I turned around to see the street slowly turning to dust, I ran towards the portal hoping it would
take me somewhere safe. I enter the gold like portal As I come out the other-side The world
starts turning into dust like our town. “Oh no” I screamed. I turn to go back to the portal But this
time the portal starts to dissolve as well, I had nowhere to go then another portal forms a few
miles away. I started to jog towards it. I leaped through it scared where it would take me.
I end on a cloud-land with nothing but a giant throne in the center. Then a giant figure jumps
over me into the throne “Where am I” I asked him, ``Hello, new one welcome to heaven” .
Now what do I do...
Kia ora Archie,
ReplyDeleteWow, what an incredible piece of writing - ka pai!
I really like the metaphors you have used throughout your text, it really helps the reader get a clear image in their heads.
Perhaps next time you could include a picture to go with your text, for example if this got turned into a book, what would the cover look like?
I hope you plan to continue this story! Your cliffhanger has me on the edge of my seat!
Great work, Archie! I have given you a digital AWHI. Keep up the great work.
:)